my quake story is coming to an end!

[gamefreak]

thats right everyone, my quake story is almost finished! be sure to read it at http://totallyuseless.proboards61.com

[Solecord]

ugh, registration required to read...

[Canadian*Sniper]

then a mob of ogres came after us so I quickly ran up the wall and used my wall jinjitsu to make a wall fall on them. Then a Death Knight came so I quickly used me sword jinjitsu to slice it into many pieces. I noticed that my foot was stabbed in the process so I used my medic jinjitsu to heal it. It was a good thing I was so fast into doing this because 100 fiends came out and tried to pierce through me. I quickly used my nuke jinjitsu and FUBARed everone in the quake universe. It didn't effect me though because I used my ICANTDIE jinjitsu.

Hey I can write 1000 pages of this stuff too

[danknugz]

come on give him a break. He is a kid.

[gamefreak]

thats what i mean about you being annoying snipez. i've been writing my quake story for over a year now, and i really dont enjoy having people mock my story. oh, and its "jutsu" not jinjutsu...and there is no such "nuke jutsu"...or many other jutsu's that you wrote about...

[Canadian*Sniper]

I can prove the existence of the nuke jitsu! Let's Nuke Texas

[Bank]

thats what i mean about you being annoying snipez. i've been writing my quake story for over a year now, and i really dont enjoy having people mock my story. oh, and its "jutsu" not jinjutsu...and there is no such "nuke jutsu"...or many other jutsu's that you wrote about...

1) For the Jitsus - That was the point : D
2) You know, I admire your effort, but it's a pretty basic story. But look at it this way: If you picked up a book that sucked, would you tell your friends it was the greatest story ever?

You need to learn the difference between criticism and mocking, most of the time, people are just trying to help with the next one, not make fun of you.

[gamefreak]

ok, now im pissed. are you saying my story sucks? i spent alot of my time writing that story, and i didnt write it for fun, i wrote it for you guys, the quakers. i dont know why my story sucks, i think its pretty good, along with many other people. i was going to write 2 more stories(and they were going to be really good), maybe more, but now im thinking about just quitting the whole thing all together.

[Canadian*Sniper]

And then Gamefreak showed up with his sexi jitsu. I was not dumb enough to fall for it though as I quickly used my nuke jitsu and blew him the fuck away. Then Quad showed up dressed as a samurai and stabbed me in the foot. Like wtf? I used my antisamurai jitsu and blew him the fuck away. Then Baker showed up and used his ban jitsu, but I quickly used my hax jitsu and blew him the fuck away.

Ok here's honest critisism. Since when was quake using ninja jitsus? I can't relate to it and therefor don't read it.

[gamefreak]

i have a simple solution to your question sniper. when you beat shub-niggurath at the end of quake...what is the quake marine holding?

[Canadian*Sniper]

an double sided axe in which ninjas aren't known for using. And sorry but I don't watch naruto so I can't relate

[QuadRaptor]

"Then Quad showed up dressed as a samurai and stabbed me in the foot. Like wtf?"

This in my story is actually a reference to FVF, where there is a Ninja class (no Samurai class but hey I had to make it sound cool). It was actually an experiment where I tried to write as detailed as I could, and then I just decided, "Well hell I wrote this so I might as well have it be the intro to my story", and so you find out it's a hologram simulation.

There's always going to be some kind of theme in writing. GameFreak's involves Ninjas, mine involves Cyborgs, and if C*S ever wrote a story, you'd damn well expect him to write about Snipers!

[Canadian*Sniper]

If I wrote a story, it would be about about Samus' Screw Attack

[gamefreak]

it may be a double headed axe, but it symbolizes blades, which ninja's use alot. i was actually going to use this part where i teleport inside shub...wait...ive said to much...uhhhh....look a bird! no really!....no...seriously...there's a little birdie flying around the forums...

[Bank]

ok, now im pissed. are you saying my story sucks? i spent alot of my time writing that story, and i didnt write it for fun, i wrote it for you guys, the quakers. i dont know why my story sucks, i think its pretty good, along with many other people. i was going to write 2 more stories(and they were going to be really good), maybe more, but now im thinking about just quitting the whole thing all together.

...you need to learn to read instead of getting in a hissy fit. I said that your story was basic, which isn't good, or bad. You cant get anywhere if you dont start somewhere. I view this as a start, and I applaud you. But even my start sucked.

If you're so worried about stories, here's one. Click

(I only did it because your story spurred me too, so feel happy for inspiring me, dont take things so seriously, it's a game.)